ML Cornwall: The Jim Dandy- Draft 1

There are some wonderful moments in this piece: "He was the first and only man I knew who could smoke an entire cigarette in two lung-filled drags." Love that. But not sure where your story is going or the through line. Your material is rich..you were right there! But not clear to me (yet) what you want to say about your experience. Any thoughts on why Friendly closed? Did you see it coming or was serving ice cream just a blissful way to earn some money? Your story needs a hook, a point-of-view.