Amy Peters: Draft 1 - "Poker"

Great detail all the way through. The scenes were vivid and I felt like I was right there. But I was thrown by your organization. Your table scene was great but I got confused by all the cutting in and out. Not did I know who Annette was when she was introduced. I think it would be stronger if you let the tournament scene play out and then cut to the background and context.

Also, the online poker bit is an important development and detail but it gets swallowed by the rest of the piece. Watch how you structure your timelines.